Talk:Jan Voronin

{{#assessment:TRA World Building|B|NA}}

Official:tm: Review

• No birth date in first sentence
• Rakhmani-born can be shortened to Rakmani in first sentence
• RKT and QSC trigrams should be in front of currency figures they’re representing
• Tzar should be lowercase throughout
• Years should no be possessive (2000’s)
• State Council should be linked when mentioned in the lede
• In the wiki date format, don’t put a comma after the month
• Elbrus needs to be linked at first mention
• Starting a sentence with “However”- Not against the Manual of Style, but grammatically not great.
• “Communism was spreading like a plague throughout southern Ostlandet and Rakhman intended to prevent it from entering its borders” maintain NPOV
• “many expected a war to breakout”- Who is many, and ‘breakout’ needs to be two separate words
• Beginning at a young age, Voronin would begin to prove his intellectual ability.” is fluffy/puffery and could be removed.
• University should be lowercase unless it starts a sentence or is part of a name
• “The two purchased a large chunk of land” Chunk is probably not the right word here, and how large was it?
• Yingtai Feng should be referred to as Yingtai after their introduction, and not linked beyond the first mention in the main text.
• Rakman has been linked multiple times, should only be linked on first mention
• The page mentions Georges Loupe, but needs a link to the page at the mention
• Left-wing coups happen “in” countries, not “on” them.
• Kivu should only be linked on first mention
• Tzardom should be lowercase
• Tzar and State Council should only be linked on first mention
• Paragraph breaks are needed throughout

--Spode (talk) 21:56, 27 August 2023 (EDT)