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== Official:tm: Review ==
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* Red Rifle in first sentence should be bolded and not in italics (he’s the subject of the article after all)
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* “Birkin tragically died” remove “tragically”
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* “Gjorkan Gran-Prix one driver” spelling error (gran vs. grand)
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* “1977 Paleocacherian Grand Prix, after his” comma can be removed
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* “controlled roughly 30% of the factories” write out “percent”
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* Nomakoa should be linked once
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* “Passed away” should just be drowned
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* “University’s dean’s” Dean’s should be lowercase
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* Starting a sentence with “However”- Not against the Manual of Style, but grammatically not great.
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* “Scuderia Scutari” is linked multiple times
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* “calling the car "a piece of sh*t"” Wikipedia is not censored :c
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* “allegedly calling the Scutari Boss” boss should be lowercase here
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* “but luckily did not cause” (don’t use adverbs basically ever)
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* “car stay in it's dry setup” wrong version of “its”
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* 7 instances of "Luján" being wrong -> "Payés Luján"
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* “The Federazione Internazionale dell'Automobile's investigation” (introduce acronym here)
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* Inconsistent date formatting
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* “Birkin and Woods go engaged” got
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* “Birkin was a devout catholic” (Catholic should be uppercase and linked), Bible should be capitalized
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* Gjorka Times should be should be italicized (MOS:Italics),
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* QB should be written out as Quarterback
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* “The Circuit was built and”, here circuit should be lowercase
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* "His father also funded” This can be “He also funded” since the paragraph already introduced Stewart as Birkin’s father
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* Birth date needs to mentioned in Early life
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--[[User:MrSpode42|Spode]] ([[User talk:MrSpode42|talk]]) 22:40, 27 August 2023 (EDT)

Latest revision as of 22:40, 27 August 2023

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Official:tm: Review

  • Red Rifle in first sentence should be bolded and not in italics (he’s the subject of the article after all)
  • “Birkin tragically died” remove “tragically”
  • “Gjorkan Gran-Prix one driver” spelling error (gran vs. grand)
  • “1977 Paleocacherian Grand Prix, after his” comma can be removed
  • “controlled roughly 30% of the factories” write out “percent”
  • Nomakoa should be linked once
  • “Passed away” should just be drowned
  • “University’s dean’s” Dean’s should be lowercase
  • Starting a sentence with “However”- Not against the Manual of Style, but grammatically not great.
  • “Scuderia Scutari” is linked multiple times
  • “calling the car "a piece of sh*t"” Wikipedia is not censored :c
  • “allegedly calling the Scutari Boss” boss should be lowercase here
  • “but luckily did not cause” (don’t use adverbs basically ever)
  • “car stay in it's dry setup” wrong version of “its”
  • 7 instances of "Luján" being wrong -> "Payés Luján"
  • “The Federazione Internazionale dell'Automobile's investigation” (introduce acronym here)
  • Inconsistent date formatting
  • “Birkin and Woods go engaged” got
  • “Birkin was a devout catholic” (Catholic should be uppercase and linked), Bible should be capitalized
  • Gjorka Times should be should be italicized (MOS:Italics),
  • QB should be written out as Quarterback
  • “The Circuit was built and”, here circuit should be lowercase
  • "His father also funded” This can be “He also funded” since the paragraph already introduced Stewart as Birkin’s father
  • Birth date needs to mentioned in Early life

--Spode (talk) 22:40, 27 August 2023 (EDT)

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