Talk:Julian

{{#assessment:TRA World Building|C|NA}}

Official:tm: Review

• Should not be using AD, too late in history
• Needs to use Death Date and Age template
• En dashes are needed for Years active when showing a timespan in years
• Painting names should be italicized (MOS:Italics)
• Dethos Island (not Island of Dethos)
• Apollonia should be linked once in the main text of the article when first mentioned
• Old Kingdom of Illyricum ceased to exist 1525 years before Julian was born, so that nationality (or the other page) is wrong
• Gallery of art section should be moved to its own page (see Wikipedia’s List of works by Leonardo da Vinci)
• "Unforgiving and impractical."- Unforgiving should be lowercase in this quote
• Sharks kill people, they don’t eat people (citation: Creeper) “eating is too specific”
• Gangsters in the 16th century? Maybe use different, more era-appropriate word.
• “One night in late September” (specify year if known).
• Sources should be unbiased, or other sources are unavailable, critically examined (Julian’s letters to his friend are primary sources).
• The start year to Julian’s professional relationship with Marius Levesio should be specified if known
• "Julian decided to forge out to make a name for himself." is non-encyclopedic
• "with the move to Illyricus a very clear change in his portrait style can be seen"- This is very subjective, but could be backed with art expert citations to become more encyclopedic
• "resented by other artists" such as?
• "iced out" is a euphemism
• “he married Adriana Pavelekh, a Pavulturilori noble” would be “noblewomen”
• For the art school, set up should be changed to established
• The art school’s reputation is highly subjective and claims need citations.
• "The idea of murder was floated by authorities"
  • Passive voice
  • Which authorities?

--Spode (talk) 19:40, 27 August 2023 (EDT)